Dear Reader,
I intend for this essay to explore the topic of school spirit at University of Denver. I want to answer the question of what school spirit means to the community, and I want to answer it in many ways; to explore what people think “school spirit” means, what it is like at DU, and then analyze why it is so important to the DU community. I would like it to show the readers that there is a lack of school spirit at University of Denver, and while everyone feels it and does not like it, nobody ever does anything about it. This paper will be intended for students at DU to read.
From the moment this paper was assigned, I knew I wanted to write about school spirit at DU. It is a topic that was important to me when I was choosing a college, and it has been an issue on my mind every since I started school here in the fall. I began the writing process by writing out a bunch of questions, starting with the most simply question of, “do you think University of Denver has school spirit?” and let the questions flow out from there, unfiltered, and writing them down as they came to mind. Through this, I feel like I was able to go deeper into the subject with my questions. I came to difficult point, though, as I could not figure out a definite research question. I looked through my questions and sought some help, and defined a clear cut question.
(will write about comments from peers after peer editing in class)
-Sara Ach
Showing posts with label process draft 11. Show all posts
Showing posts with label process draft 11. Show all posts
Monday, April 25, 2011
Chris Martin Process Draft
Dear Reader,
This essay is a qualitative study performed on the University of Denver student body. I believe that at the University of Denver, that many students do not follow the DU drug policy. I have personally observed the policy being broken and I believe that a major part of it is what the policy entails. Living in a city like Denver, means students are exposed to a variety medical marijuana offices and dispensaries. I truly believe that this has a profound effect on how University of Denver students view drug use and the drug policy. Many students are in possession of a medical marijuana license, yet still cannot utilize their medication on the campus. The true purpose of this study is to discover what factors affect the student’s perception of the drug policy and if the setting of Denver, CO has anything to do with it.
I picked a topic like DU’s drug policy because of its relevance to our campus and city. The city of Denver has been very progressive in its medical marijuana legalization and going to a University nearly surrounded by medical marijuana dispensaries can be influential among the student body. This topic also provides insight to the population of DU and the perception of Denver’s medical marijuana as well. Also, this can exemplify the nature of the “normal DU” student, and their perception of the city and the school.
This essay is a qualitative study performed on the University of Denver student body. I believe that at the University of Denver, that many students do not follow the DU drug policy. I have personally observed the policy being broken and I believe that a major part of it is what the policy entails. Living in a city like Denver, means students are exposed to a variety medical marijuana offices and dispensaries. I truly believe that this has a profound effect on how University of Denver students view drug use and the drug policy. Many students are in possession of a medical marijuana license, yet still cannot utilize their medication on the campus. The true purpose of this study is to discover what factors affect the student’s perception of the drug policy and if the setting of Denver, CO has anything to do with it.
I picked a topic like DU’s drug policy because of its relevance to our campus and city. The city of Denver has been very progressive in its medical marijuana legalization and going to a University nearly surrounded by medical marijuana dispensaries can be influential among the student body. This topic also provides insight to the population of DU and the perception of Denver’s medical marijuana as well. Also, this can exemplify the nature of the “normal DU” student, and their perception of the city and the school.
Mike Ness Process Draftp
Dear Reader,
What are the motivators for college men and women to join fraternities or sororities? What about them makes them interesting and appealing to incoming freshmen or even current students?
I plan to ask questions such as whether or not the individual knew that they wanted to be apart of Greek life prior to attending DU. If they knew they wanted to join a fraternity or sorority did they know which one? I plan to get a quantitative amount of legacies.
To get a more qualitative response I plan on asking the participants their feelings on DU’s Greek life after they decided to join. I plan to seek out the pros and cons individuals feel to be true about DU Greek life.
Mike Ness
What are the motivators for college men and women to join fraternities or sororities? What about them makes them interesting and appealing to incoming freshmen or even current students?
I plan to ask questions such as whether or not the individual knew that they wanted to be apart of Greek life prior to attending DU. If they knew they wanted to join a fraternity or sorority did they know which one? I plan to get a quantitative amount of legacies.
To get a more qualitative response I plan on asking the participants their feelings on DU’s Greek life after they decided to join. I plan to seek out the pros and cons individuals feel to be true about DU Greek life.
Mike Ness
Westin Underberger- Process Draft
Dear Reader,
This paper is about a study that was performed to see whether or not people that live outside the state of California hold a bias against the Los Angeles Lakers. As a student at the University of Denver, one of the most common quotes I hear around campus is: “Lakers suck” or “I hate the Lakers.” As a result, it has given me the idea to discover if people outside of the state of California are truly opposed to the Lakers. By surveying the population at the University of Denver, it will provide a greater insight on the opinions of the Lakers from a group of people that are not from the city of Los Angeles. It is my hope that the survey results will show me how ones hometown effects the feelings they have towards other teams.
I chose this topic because the city of Los Angeles is where I grew up, and upon hearing so much hatred and disgust towards the city and its basketball team, I have been extremely curious as to who are people that are Lakers fans, and whether or not it is a regional thing.
Sincerely,
Westin Underberger
This paper is about a study that was performed to see whether or not people that live outside the state of California hold a bias against the Los Angeles Lakers. As a student at the University of Denver, one of the most common quotes I hear around campus is: “Lakers suck” or “I hate the Lakers.” As a result, it has given me the idea to discover if people outside of the state of California are truly opposed to the Lakers. By surveying the population at the University of Denver, it will provide a greater insight on the opinions of the Lakers from a group of people that are not from the city of Los Angeles. It is my hope that the survey results will show me how ones hometown effects the feelings they have towards other teams.
I chose this topic because the city of Los Angeles is where I grew up, and upon hearing so much hatred and disgust towards the city and its basketball team, I have been extremely curious as to who are people that are Lakers fans, and whether or not it is a regional thing.
Sincerely,
Westin Underberger
Ryan Biondo - Process Draft
Religion is a subject that I have considered for very much most of my life. My parents and all my family before them have been devout Catholics. I began to wonder, after years of catholic practice, if I was truly believing in the religion. Certainly the Catholic church in it's most basic values, value peace, honesty, justice, and spirituality, and these are certainly values of my own. I felt like I understood the processes of morality and spirituality for myself, and that the Catholic church kept me from fully experiencing life. But my parents continued to force me into religious education classes and church on Sundays, even if I tried to choose otherwise. Now that I have created a distance between my parents and I, I have been able to freely explore the beliefs that I believe more identify with me, like Satanism, Zen Buddhism, Hinduism, and Atheism. The point of learning from other beliefs, is to gain more understanding of the entire human perspective, and help myself. I want to see how other people have changed their views (or not) since leaving their families and coming to DU.
Process Draft-Brendan Hickey
Dear Reader,
I have written this essay in order to determine how the immigration should be dealt with in the United States. While the united states currently has a policies and practices for bring immigrants into the united states, the survey I have conducted gauges possible improvements to the existing system. The main reason for writing this was to determine the best course of action in dealing with immigration.
The issue of immigration is of interest to me since I have the opinion that the system could use some improvement. This issue has also been very popular lately with the violence in Mexico and Arizona. In order to gauge how others feel immigration should be dealt with I built the questionnaire to garner various solutions or lack there of.
The results of my questionnaire combined with the solutions that have already been researched should provide a good overall view of what citizens feel should be done to improve the immigration policy.
Signed,
Brendan William Hickey
I have written this essay in order to determine how the immigration should be dealt with in the United States. While the united states currently has a policies and practices for bring immigrants into the united states, the survey I have conducted gauges possible improvements to the existing system. The main reason for writing this was to determine the best course of action in dealing with immigration.
The issue of immigration is of interest to me since I have the opinion that the system could use some improvement. This issue has also been very popular lately with the violence in Mexico and Arizona. In order to gauge how others feel immigration should be dealt with I built the questionnaire to garner various solutions or lack there of.
The results of my questionnaire combined with the solutions that have already been researched should provide a good overall view of what citizens feel should be done to improve the immigration policy.
Signed,
Brendan William Hickey
Jennessa Lever Process Draft
The purpose of my paper is to determine the reasons for why students choose to participate in Greek Life. There are many incentives to choosing this type of college lifestyle. You are guaranteed a social life, friends are introduced to you, and after college it could lead to job opportunities. I will use questionnaires to gather the reasons people joined Greek Life, and why they decided to stay a part of it. This topic is of particular interest to me because I am considering joining Greek Life next year for the benefits it provides its members. Many times my friends are able to go to Greek Events while I am forced to simply study, and I know that through their Greek connections they will be able to get a job straight out of college. Many influential people have been Greek thus it is possible that it could be worth everyone’s while to find out if that is true. This paper delves into this mystery.
Elliott Process Note
Dear Reader,
This paper is designed to bring to mind the issue that is under-aged drinking. I wrote this paper with the fact in mind that many freshman at DU are currently drinking illegally. The audience of this paper are students at DU as well as falculty and administrators who deal with teen drinking.
The first part of my essay is an introduction to the issue that is teen drinking. I mention fake ID’s and the issues with the legal drinking age. This has always been an interesting topic for me because it is something that is relevant and has always been an issue in America. I designed a questionnaire to ask my peers and to get their opinions on this issue.
My research was first designed to ask whether or not students are drinking illegally, however, this is against ethical research policies so I changed my questionnaire to ask peoples opinions on the matter. During my research I found that many students are of the opinion that the drinking age should be lowered. This was something I expected and something my research showed to be true.
Thank you,
Jeff Elliott
This paper is designed to bring to mind the issue that is under-aged drinking. I wrote this paper with the fact in mind that many freshman at DU are currently drinking illegally. The audience of this paper are students at DU as well as falculty and administrators who deal with teen drinking.
The first part of my essay is an introduction to the issue that is teen drinking. I mention fake ID’s and the issues with the legal drinking age. This has always been an interesting topic for me because it is something that is relevant and has always been an issue in America. I designed a questionnaire to ask my peers and to get their opinions on this issue.
My research was first designed to ask whether or not students are drinking illegally, however, this is against ethical research policies so I changed my questionnaire to ask peoples opinions on the matter. During my research I found that many students are of the opinion that the drinking age should be lowered. This was something I expected and something my research showed to be true.
Thank you,
Jeff Elliott
Rachel Richard - Process Draft
Dear Reader,
This essay will discuss the possible issues and difficulties that only children face when coming to college and living in dormitories their first year. The topic was designed as an experiment to find if in fact it is harder for only children to adapt to college dorm life, rather than children with one or more siblings. As a result, any one who may read this may understand the possible issues or difficulties they may face being an only child in a college dorm situation.
I chose this topic because coming from a family of two younger siblings and being able to adapt to college living very nicely I wondered what the experience was like for only children. I have many friends who have no siblings and they have described the experience as challenging. I wanted to research and discover if this was true for all only children entering the college environment. I will be bringing in evidence from outside sources of experiences from only children as an idea as well as experiences of children with siblings. This paper topic is mainly for me to understand what it might be like to be an only child.
My data that I used to find this information was in a questionnaire. I read over the answers and was able to get the basic idea of the differences between only children and children with siblings.
Respectfully,
Rachel Richard
This essay will discuss the possible issues and difficulties that only children face when coming to college and living in dormitories their first year. The topic was designed as an experiment to find if in fact it is harder for only children to adapt to college dorm life, rather than children with one or more siblings. As a result, any one who may read this may understand the possible issues or difficulties they may face being an only child in a college dorm situation.
I chose this topic because coming from a family of two younger siblings and being able to adapt to college living very nicely I wondered what the experience was like for only children. I have many friends who have no siblings and they have described the experience as challenging. I wanted to research and discover if this was true for all only children entering the college environment. I will be bringing in evidence from outside sources of experiences from only children as an idea as well as experiences of children with siblings. This paper topic is mainly for me to understand what it might be like to be an only child.
My data that I used to find this information was in a questionnaire. I read over the answers and was able to get the basic idea of the differences between only children and children with siblings.
Respectfully,
Rachel Richard
Natalie Roche Process Draft
Natalie Roche
April 19, 2011
Writing 1133
Essay 2:
Uniform and Unified – Are they the Same as they Sound?
My introduction. first paragraph goes into my process of how I interviewed people, the criteria, etc. How do school students feel as individuals about school uniforms, whether they are forced to wear them in an academic environment or not but have seen others doing so? I was interested in seeing how people felt their freedoms were limited (or not) simply by being forced to wear certain attire in school, and to conduct my research I assembled a list of fifteen questions based off of this main idea asking students about certain aspects of their lives that could possibly be hindered by wearing or not wearing a uniform. Fourteen of these people between the ages of eighteen and twenty-two responded. Three of them were male and the rest were female. Five students total had worn a school uniform in their lives before for two to nine years of their lives (one male, four females), though none of them were currently in a position where they were wearing one. The rest were simply speculating what it would be like to wear one if they did, using their own school experiences without being forced into a uniform to make their opinions. I divided my research between these two separate groups and compared their answers together, as well as to examples of experts who enforced wearing a school uniform, to determine the overall feelings of the public about this issue through two different sources. These sources were from professional viewpoints, based off of the ideas of school safety and the importance of school uniforms. My interest was to compare the values of the students to those enforcing the rules to see how their feelings compared in all aspects of the situation regarding school uniforms.
Secondly, I went into the results, and how this has to do with Colorado. After collecting all the data, I properly divided the people who filled out the questionnaire between uniforms and non-uniforms. Then, I read each section invidually, summed up the main points from each grouping, and compared the two different answers to find how they differed. Here, I will list the main points of what I noticed in all of the arguments. One main aspect was that in the professional articles, the adutls stated that the safety that comes with school uniforms is the most important piece, and “the pros of having uniforms in schools are definitely higher than the cons, but the students will continue to go against the idea as far as it doesn't make them feel good”.
April 19, 2011
Writing 1133
Essay 2:
Uniform and Unified – Are they the Same as they Sound?
My introduction. first paragraph goes into my process of how I interviewed people, the criteria, etc. How do school students feel as individuals about school uniforms, whether they are forced to wear them in an academic environment or not but have seen others doing so? I was interested in seeing how people felt their freedoms were limited (or not) simply by being forced to wear certain attire in school, and to conduct my research I assembled a list of fifteen questions based off of this main idea asking students about certain aspects of their lives that could possibly be hindered by wearing or not wearing a uniform. Fourteen of these people between the ages of eighteen and twenty-two responded. Three of them were male and the rest were female. Five students total had worn a school uniform in their lives before for two to nine years of their lives (one male, four females), though none of them were currently in a position where they were wearing one. The rest were simply speculating what it would be like to wear one if they did, using their own school experiences without being forced into a uniform to make their opinions. I divided my research between these two separate groups and compared their answers together, as well as to examples of experts who enforced wearing a school uniform, to determine the overall feelings of the public about this issue through two different sources. These sources were from professional viewpoints, based off of the ideas of school safety and the importance of school uniforms. My interest was to compare the values of the students to those enforcing the rules to see how their feelings compared in all aspects of the situation regarding school uniforms.
Secondly, I went into the results, and how this has to do with Colorado. After collecting all the data, I properly divided the people who filled out the questionnaire between uniforms and non-uniforms. Then, I read each section invidually, summed up the main points from each grouping, and compared the two different answers to find how they differed. Here, I will list the main points of what I noticed in all of the arguments. One main aspect was that in the professional articles, the adutls stated that the safety that comes with school uniforms is the most important piece, and “the pros of having uniforms in schools are definitely higher than the cons, but the students will continue to go against the idea as far as it doesn't make them feel good”.
Kelly Terry Process Draft
Dear Reader,
Restaurants consist of two worlds: the world they portray to their customers and the backstage, more secret world. The money that servers make in tips is usually their entire income and paycheck due to taxes, therefore each time a person eats at a restaurant and leaves a measly two or three dollars to represent their gratitude, those dollars are noted and cherished. My paper attempts to look deeper into the backstage world of waitressing and the tactics they utilize to raise their tip income. The readers of my paper I would assume to be servers who are a part of the backstage restaurant life looking for new and useful ways to raise tips or people who are generally interested in the culinary world. I hope that this paper proves to be insightful and informative about the restaurant world.
Although I am such a person who is interested in the culinary world, I seriously struggled while deciding on a topic. My study topic initially dealt with the affect that students’ parents’ discipline theories in high school had on students’ partying tendencies in college. However, after realizing that this topic is not in compliance with IRB regulations, I switched my topic to the social pressures and discrimination experienced by lesbian and gay students. Unfortuneately, this topic does not follow IRB regulations either, so I again changed my topic… this time to the issue of airport security and the general public’s opinion of the system. After deciding that asking people in an airport what their impression of the security system is might be intrusive and possibly disturbing to many airport travelers, I decided on my topic regarding restaurant serving and the tipping phenomenon.
The planning that I put into my project was in a very organized fashion. I began by researching different studies that dealt with my topic and formulating my review of literature. After having a base of knowledge to deal with this topic, I decided on three restaurants to observe the servers and their interactions with the customers.
Because I struggled so much with deciding on a topic, I was helped by comments and suggestions of my teacher and by looking at examples of different ethnography studies. I also read different studies to get an idea of how they wrote and organized their article.
Kelly Terry
Bao Le - Process Draft
Dear Reader,
This essay was meant to examine the benefits or costs of not having a student center at DU. I approached this essay with the idea that DU’s students have coped with not having a student center but was relatively unsure about whether this was detrimental or not to student life in general. My main point is to come to a conclusion as to whether a more traditional student center is needed at DU or not.
This topic has always been interesting to me as a commuter student. There simply is no designated place for students to spend their times outside of classrooms or dorms at DU. So to gather information on to what other students think, I’ve designed a questionnaire to ask my fellow students: Where do they spend their time and why?
I’ve used this data plus the data from my observations as to where the largest population of students gathers outside of classrooms to see whether students have created their own makeshift student center locations. The combination of this data should allow me to see if students exhibit a need for a student center or not.
Signed,
Bao Le
This essay was meant to examine the benefits or costs of not having a student center at DU. I approached this essay with the idea that DU’s students have coped with not having a student center but was relatively unsure about whether this was detrimental or not to student life in general. My main point is to come to a conclusion as to whether a more traditional student center is needed at DU or not.
This topic has always been interesting to me as a commuter student. There simply is no designated place for students to spend their times outside of classrooms or dorms at DU. So to gather information on to what other students think, I’ve designed a questionnaire to ask my fellow students: Where do they spend their time and why?
I’ve used this data plus the data from my observations as to where the largest population of students gathers outside of classrooms to see whether students have created their own makeshift student center locations. The combination of this data should allow me to see if students exhibit a need for a student center or not.
Signed,
Bao Le
Adrianna Romero_Process Draft
Dear Reader,
The main purpose of this essay is to examine the knowledge that several DU students have regarding its policy on the use of medical marijuana and then have them state their opinion of said policy. The audience of this essay is not only the DU student population but also the administration that enforces the policy and is in charge of educating the students about it.
The first part of the essay is to inform readers about the existing marijuana policy on campus as well as some of Colorado’s statewide policies. Because these two guidelines are very different, I mention why this may be and how DU students are expected to act. The second part of the essay is made up of a research survey that I conducted and the results of it.
My investigation was initially about the amount of DU students that owned a medical marijuana card and still chose to use it on campus despite the policy and why. After reviewing the project with my supervisor I was reminded that this type of investigation was not appropriate for class work. The research questions for this investigation would be incriminating to the students therefore I changed my angle in the topic. I then chose to see how many students had a medical marijuana license and how they felt about the policy. The goal was to find a correlation between those who had a license and their feelings on the policy. During my research period I found that most students were not even aware of the current medical marijuana policy on the DU campus. This brought up some interesting discussion topics for m y conclusion in which I present possible solutions for the lack of knowledge of the policy.
The main purpose of this essay is to examine the knowledge that several DU students have regarding its policy on the use of medical marijuana and then have them state their opinion of said policy. The audience of this essay is not only the DU student population but also the administration that enforces the policy and is in charge of educating the students about it.
The first part of the essay is to inform readers about the existing marijuana policy on campus as well as some of Colorado’s statewide policies. Because these two guidelines are very different, I mention why this may be and how DU students are expected to act. The second part of the essay is made up of a research survey that I conducted and the results of it.
My investigation was initially about the amount of DU students that owned a medical marijuana card and still chose to use it on campus despite the policy and why. After reviewing the project with my supervisor I was reminded that this type of investigation was not appropriate for class work. The research questions for this investigation would be incriminating to the students therefore I changed my angle in the topic. I then chose to see how many students had a medical marijuana license and how they felt about the policy. The goal was to find a correlation between those who had a license and their feelings on the policy. During my research period I found that most students were not even aware of the current medical marijuana policy on the DU campus. This brought up some interesting discussion topics for m y conclusion in which I present possible solutions for the lack of knowledge of the policy.
Mazurek Process Draft
Dear Reader,
This essay is about a qualitative study that I performed about the knowledge and acceptance among students of the University of Denver, of converting the campus’ grass into a native grass species such as buffalo grass. I discuss previous research in order to illustrate the necessity of this conversion and to provide you with some background information regarding the topic. My purpose is to discover the extent to which DU students care about, are knowledgeable about, and are accepting to sustainability initiatives on campus. My readers will be college students. It is my hope that this qualitative essay will inform and inspire students to take the initiative to help make their campus more sustainable.
I chose this topic because sustainability is a major interest of mine and the current grass on DU’s campus requires a very unsustainable amount of watering and fertilizers. I began by researching the unsustainable practice of maintaining a non-native lawn. I then conducted my research by having students participate in a questionnaire regarding their views on the importance of sustainability, their knowledge of unsustainable practices in DU’s campus, and their acceptance to sustainability initiatives on campus.
Peer revisions and class activities helped me by pointing out areas where poor sentence structure and other grammar related issues were present. They also helped me by broadening my perspective on the issue and by giving me multiple perspectives.
Thank you,
Jared Mazurek
Sunday, April 24, 2011
Process Note Critique
Peer Critique : Process Note
For this critique, I would like you to do something a bit different than we’ve done before: I want you to be a skeptic, question everything about your peer’s writing. Please do so kindly. Your questions should help prod the writer to think through her or his writing more carefully.
In addition to focusing on any concerns of the author and on any concerns that you notice while reading, please address the following items:
1. Describe what portions of the process note are currently the clearest and most effective. Please be as specific as possible. In other words, writing that, “Your introduction is clear and interesting” does not provide specificity or detail that lets the author know what is working and why. Instead you should try writing comments that give the author some clear direction, “The word choice in your discussion of audience was particularly useful in that you clearly described that you thought your audience did not know the reasons for the DU smoking ban because most people you know are against it. What is not clear, however, is how you have used this preliminary instinct to construct a research question or hypothesis.
2. Compare the process note with what the author has already drafted of the paper. Essentially, I am asking that you determine if the author’s qualitative paper lives up to the promise of the process note. Again, please be critical, but do so nicely, so the author will receive useful feedback from you. While you might find the writing to be “good,” most writing can usually be improved and clarified.
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