Eli Rosen-In Class Revision Exercise

For my portfolio, I will be revising my qualitative assignment. My qualitative assignment was on the University Of Denver student populations’ knowledge and actions on environmental issues. In this essay, I clearly state the main point of my research which summarizes the entire scope of my essay. However, I think that I could have done a better job when referring to others work and how the writer persuades. I did a good job of saying what he argues, but not necessarily how. I think if I re-read the article, it will become evident how he argues and all I need to do is explain that. Also, in my qualitative essay I wrote a fairly weak conclusion. I think that my conclusion was weak because instead of revisiting and making my argument stronger, I just summarized my essay. In order to change this, I will probably scrap most of the conclusion and try to rewrite it. Instead of reiterating my entire essay and just repeating myself, I will briefly visit he main point of my essay.