Bland_In Class Revisions

In my qualitative assignment, I need to work on my analysis. My thesis was clearly discussing how people develop religious affiliations, but I tended to use information or results that contradicted itself. This is because my interviews did not yield paralleled information to my thesis. I need to reflect on this by showing the differences in opinions and how that brings a bigger conclusion to my research. I also need to start my paper with more of a hook. I jumped right into the discussion without letting the reader get invested in the topic. Which reflects my problem with transitions. I need to work on the fluidity of paragraphs and sentences to conclude an idea and move on with relevancy.
Another thing to work on in my analysis was the citing of sources. Although I used scholarly sources and used strong examples to support my own research, I did not cite the sources properly in text or on my citation page. I also did not explain the ethos of the author’s pieces that I chose. In my review of literature I need to explain how the piece is useful and why the author’s information can be used in a credible piece of writing. This will bring more reliability to my own conclusions as well as bring more background to the reader about the topic.