Dear Reader,
This essay will discuss the possible issues and difficulties that only children face when coming to college and living in dormitories their first year. The topic was designed as an experiment to find if in fact it is harder for only children to adapt to college dorm life, rather than children with one or more siblings. As a result, any one who may read this may understand the possible issues or difficulties they may face being an only child in a college dorm situation.
I chose this topic because coming from a family of two younger siblings and being able to adapt to college living very nicely I wondered what the experience was like for only children. I have many friends who have no siblings and they have described the experience as challenging. I wanted to research and discover if this was true for all only children entering the college environment. I will be bringing in evidence from outside sources of experiences from only children as an idea as well as experiences of children with siblings. This paper topic is mainly for me to understand what it might be like to be an only child.
My data that I used to find this information was in a questionnaire. I read over the answers and was able to get the basic idea of the differences between only children and children with siblings.
Respectfully,
Rachel Richard
1. You say how you're interested in the research, and it's a good topic because most freshman students are facing some sort of "growing up" dilemma. You explain that you have siblings, and that means something to a certain extent. You want to explore whether or not students with siblings have an easier time adapting to college dorm life than those without siblings. I like that a purpose for writing the paper is to help you better understand what it's like to be an only child.
ReplyDelete2. My only concern is that maybe the sibling situation may not have the direct effect you think it might have, or the results may be the opposite of what you thought, and students without siblings are doing better in college life than those with - which is completely fine, as long as the ideas reflect the research. Your topic is broad enough to be able to view why students are in their individual situations, and shouldn't be entirely exclusive to the sibling situation.
1. In the process note, your topic on finding out whether or not children who come from families with multiple siblings, versus being an only child and how that effects living in the college dormitory is stated very clearly. When reading through this process letter I had no trouble at all figuring out what your question for discussion was, and how you were to go about answering that. You used a very simple word choice that helped add to the clarity of your writing. However the only thing I am slightly confused on is the type of questions you may have used in your questionnaire. How do you plan on linking whether or not having a sibling has affected the lifestyle of the student?
ReplyDelete2. Judging by the process note I have read, your paper clearly lives up to the promise that is made. Your work is clear and concise, and does not waste any time getting directly to the point. If the entire paper were written with the same language and tone, it would be very much beneficial to the reader as well. Overall this is very well written, and the final draft should be very clear and concise.Just make sure to address how the lifestyle of the student was compromised (if any) by being an only child. Good Job :D