Mark Meziere -- In-Class Revision Exercise

I would use the Thesis/Main Claim bullet to revise my 1st paper which I completed about medical marijuana and its effects on Denver. For this paper I did not have the strongest main idea/argument. In the first two paragraphs I touch on what I am trying to get through to the reader but I could make it much more clear to the reader. I feel I did not let the reader know what my stance is on the topic. I could also make the paper more even in the terms of negatives and positives of medical marijuana. I also feel I could revise how I talk about my sources which I use. If I better explain the sources I use the reader will better understand how it fits into the paper which will help formulate a more solid main idea. My conclusion is not the most of my problems but can be touched up a little to become a strong finish which embodies my argument.