Dear Reader,
The main purpose of writing my essay is to examine the extra difficulties put onto student athletes in college. I originally approached this essay realizing that student athletes really do have a lot more responsibilities to cope in college. But I wanted to dive deeper into the issue and really see the exact reasons for their added stresses. By asking many student athletes questions on how their daily life goes with attending classes, practices, getting homework done, as well as finding time for some rest and relaxation time.
The first part of my paper does contain an introduction that does explain my hypothesis as well as the main point for writing it. The next section contains my methods for writing the paper, which I used my interview questions that I constructed as well as other strategies I used as well as discussing the other research used in looking up information on the topic. Then finally I will discuss the results for the many interviews that I constructed as well as comparing those results to the main question I came up with.
Joey Messina
Great process note! It seems like you have a clear purpose and direction, but here are some things I noticed...
ReplyDelete"Extra difficulties put onto student athletes in college" is a VERY broad topic. You did start to narrow it down at the end of the paragraph, but it may be wise to come up with some solid questions connecting the topics you have listed.
In your next paragraph, you just outlined an outline. Tell me what your hypothesis is instead of telling me you have one, and let me know what other strategies you are talking about.
Overall, looks like you have a pretty clear idea of what you want to pursue, my only advice would be to lock it down and get some solid questions that you want answered from this.